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TimoJ



Joined: 12 Jun 2006
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 16, 2006 2:02 pm    Post subject: Hey, i need your help with my lyrics

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Hey, I m Timo and i need some help. i wrote a new song but i dont know if everything is okay.. cuz your english is probably better than mine:) thats why it would be cool if you could correct my lyrics.. thanks.
here it is and i hope u like it :

"Nobody loves me"
written by: Timo Januschewski

I cut myself so many times
Just to see me bleeding
I was addicted to drugs
And fucking ready for dyin´
Now I m still broken and confused
Without love or self-esteem
My life is tearing me apart
So I feel just like James Dean

Nobody loves me
Nobody cares when I die
Nobody loves me
I m too broken to cry
So I fly over the oceans with broken wings
But I will still fly even if the night begins
(No one can hurt me anymore)

I fell asleep with whiskey and beer
And woke up all alone
No one was there to help me out
I lived my life on my own
Now I m still broken and confused
Without love or self-estem
My life is tearing me apart
So I feel just like James Dean








www.soundlift.com/TimoJanuschewski

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 18, 2006 11:34 pm    Post subject:

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start to rewrite the first part because I think this is the reason why you will not get any replies, if I'm honest it needs a lot of work, take more time to look for the right words which express what you feel because now I only see and feel anger. Keep trying! If you are interested all our lyrics are on www.gain-insight.net maybe they'll help.

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